I loved you, you made me, hate me. You gave me, hate, see?. It saved me and these tears are deadly. You feel that? I rip that, everytime you tried to seal that. You feel bad? you feel sad? I'm sorry, Hell no fuck that! It was my heart, it was my life, it was my start, it was your knife. This strife It dies, this life and these lies. And these lungs have sung this song for too long, and it's true I Hurt too, remember I loved you!
I've, Lost it all, fell today, It's all the same I'm sorry oh I'm sorry I'm sorry no, no I've, been abused, I feel so used, because of you I'm sorry oh I'm sorry I'm sorry no, no
I wish I could I could have quit you. I wish I never missed you, And told you that I loved you, every Time I Fucked you. The future that we both drew, and all the shit we've been through. Obsessed with the Thought of you, the pain just grew and grew! How could you do this to me? Look at what I made for you, It never was enough and the world is what I gave to you. I used to be love struck, now I'm just fucked Up. Pull up my sleeves and see the pattern of my cuts!
Seems like all we had is over now you left to rest. And your tears are dried up now, you just lay without a sound. Seems like all we had is over now, you left to rest. And my fears are over now, I can leave with my head down.
Anatomically this is fantastic! The woman's pose is a little awkward angle-wise and you pulled it off flawlessly. Great work on the muscle structure in the legs and arms, and the hair looks great! The wings are a little ratty and stringy, rather than damaged looking, which I assume was the intent. My only other negative comment would be the lines coming from the cuts on her forearm. I would have made the flow from the blood to the demon a little more subtle, but since the whole thing is done in blood anyway, you really didn't have many options, so that's really just a style point. Overall great job!
:3 Thank you so much. Haha I really appreciate any critique I can get. By damaged looking, how would you make that? Like, what would you change? And yes, I realized that after I had finished lining (That was the last part I did) And since it was pen, I didn't think white out would look to good. ._.
First off this is purely my interpretation of the piece, so if this wasn't what you were going for, disregard my comments. I assume that you were protraying her as a 'fallen angel', and that the wings are either wet or ragged or torn. They look a little more disheveled than damaged, mostly because of their size and narrow feather points. I would try to make them a little bigger at the widest point (after the joint curve) and break them up from there. Of course, that is entirely my opinion, so take it for what it's worth xD
I don't think white out would have worked either xD I think after a closer look it isn't such a detremental feature as much as just a nit picky aspect. A lot of your pieces are so clean that there isn't a lot I can critique, so I can almost never look at anything and be like WOW LOOK AT THAT HUGE, OBVIOUS MISTAKE. I really have to look for one, so I think you should take in mind that any negative comments I have I had to really look for.
I wish I could draw my own blood and paint like this...
Im not allowed to anymore :I
And rightfully so, it's never a good thing.
I cut all along my legs to get my blood...
Sometimes.
By damaged looking, how would you make that? Like, what would you change?
And yes, I realized that after I had finished lining (That was the last part I did) And since it was pen, I didn't think white out would look to good. ._.
I don't think white out would have worked either xD I think after a closer look it isn't such a detremental feature as much as just a nit picky aspect. A lot of your pieces are so clean that there isn't a lot I can critique, so I can almost never look at anything and be like WOW LOOK AT THAT HUGE, OBVIOUS MISTAKE. I really have to look for one, so I think you should take in mind that any negative comments I have I had to really look for.